I think that the only thing i would probably change would be more light reflecting on the sword..The right eye tense has to be somehow balanced . However I'd like to know what did you have in mind..Which is the message you want to pass through your photo? That would make all the difference..I believe it is almost as egual to the color-one I really adore!!
In this case you have succeded your goal ! This photo made me wonder what your intention as a photographer was while making this portrait! No need for further critique no need to change anything at all.. You answer made all the difference!
A very good piece. I agree about the the distancing and the sword does to be exposed some how. The only other thing is the hands, they should be reversed, uless ofcore he is left handed, lol. But all in all it is a great piece. Next to the katana that phillipino sword he is wielding is my favorite.
Hmm, I guess I will try and critique it. Amazing, hard to not blather on about something subjective. (such as the chest hairs). But I digress. I think that he should have taken a broader stance as if to anticipate combat, then backed up the camera so that the entire sword was still in frame. Maybe try getting some light to reflect off the blade so that it sticks out more. (assuming you didn't have the sword fade into the background.) Other than that, I see nothing else I can really suggest. But, I might try again in a couple hours when I am a bit more awake.